January assessment Learner Response

1) Type up your feedback in full

WWW:

• Lots of positives here 
• Covered a wide variety of NDM aspects
• Used a fair number of quotes 

EBI:

• More examples and theories required 
• Spelled 'elite' wrong thought the essay
• More topic sentences at the end of paragraphs linking to the question in detail

2) Read through the mark scheme. Of the six different statements, write which you think is currently your strongest and which is weakest. Explain WHY and, for the weakest, what you are going to do to improve in that area.

I had a clear focus on the question, i think this was due to the topic sentences throughout the essay. For my weakness there was an lack of sophisticated application of media debates, therefore I need to improve on applying a range of media debates issues and theories and wider contexts- mainly media issues as I didn't include enough examples. I will research more up to date examples to improve in this area. 

3) Read through the exemplar A grade essay. What does this essay offer that yours does not? Identify THREE things you can take from this essay to improve your own responses in future.

• Have a longer conclusion
• More depth into news case study
• Use more recent examples especially for citizen journalism 

4) Write ONE new paragraph for your January assessment essay. Ideally, this should be a section you did not cover in your original essay. This paragraph needs to be comprehensive and meet the criteria for Level 4 of the mark scheme.

Although the internet has provided basis for a mass of information to be distributed globally, it is also possible for misinformation to occur. This could be done by both professional journalists and amateur bloggers. For example the IBTtimes published a story which stated the Iranian minister for ICT, had announced plans to remove public internet access in Iran and replace it with a state controlled national portal. This information was incorrect and was later removed which proves that even professionals can make mistakes on the internet, making it harder to know who to trust. Wikipedia is likely to be the most unreliable source as it is edited by ordinary people who do not usually know the facts behind a story making it a hard source to trust; despite this people still rely on it as a major source of information.